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I gifted you Earth
to strengthen your foundation.
You buried my heart.
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I gave you the sky.
You ran away with the stars,
and blackened my sun.
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For Kenny Penn's Haikuplet Challenge
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (18)
Beautifully done… congratulations 🥳.
Wow, so impactful! Beautiful!
Cathy, this is absolutely exceptional. WOW, and congratulations!! Every line was brilliants!
Cathy, you've done it again! What a powerful, poignant lament. This is why haiku was invented.
Congrats, co-winner!! Your haikuplet is truly a gem! Very honored to have mine place alongside such a strong piece!
This is a splendid set of haikus. Well done and congrats again on the win!
Awesome entry, Cathy! And congrats on winning Kenny’s Challenge!
Loved your nature poem!!!♥♥♥
Emotion at its strongest. Wow! I love haikus. 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
Oh this was so ouchy! This encapsulates that kind of relationship perfectly
Great take on it
Haikuplet...what...another poetic form. What a terrible thing for a person to do, running off with a heart.
Powerfully evocative! Great use of natural elements in such a narrative piece!!
Whoaaa, that second stanza!! Gosh imagine someone doing that to us. It's soooo devastating! I freaking loved this masterpiece of yours!
Good gawd Cathy this Haikuplet is fantastic! I really loved the earth and sky theme, hit me hard in the feels. Great job!
😔 Terrific imagery Cathy. Short and bittersweet. 👏☺️
Cathy.. these are fundamentally powerful. Fantastic work. Well done.
I love the epic, elemental feel of your Haiku stanzas, almost as if God had gifted the Earth and the sky to an ungrateful and duplicitous creation. Very, very powerful poetry, Cathy!