I was taught to be a good host.
So if you spend the night, I’ll need to know how you take your coffee for the morning.
Because making coffee is my favorite thing to do.
Have you made coffee at home, it’s simple. No really.
The sound of the beans when I pour them into the grinder.
The smell as the shavings sit in the filter.
As I boil the water there are other things to do.
I wander into your office, would you like some coffee too?
And you smile and say, thank you, dear.
What you don’t understand is how much I love doing this for you.
I do my best to give you a great cup of coffee so that every time you have coffee…
Do you think of me?
All the sleepless nights and endless cups, where we laughed and tried every roast.
And now I still make coffee.
And I find myself looking for you because I have an extra cup.
And it’s always for you.
About the Creator
Jazzy
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Head of the Jazzy Writers Association (JWA) in partnership with the Vocal HWA chapter.
Off the Book
It ended like every other stupid idea. Badly, and alone. I’m researching digital confession ethics, he said. A tech ethicist. He gestured at floating data I couldn’t see then pulled out a physical notebook. Actual paper, fountain pen. He held it up like he was showing me scripture.
By Nicky Frankly5 days ago in Fiction
Comments (11)
Jazzy this one was so pretty. The ending made me sad, it reminded me of loved ones that have passed on, but sad or not it's a beautiful piece. Going to bed for tonight but I am going to continue to hunt for the A.C. Easter eggs. Its giving me an opportunity to go through your excellent poetry
I can taste my favorite cup of coffee while reading this. It’s certainly fit for publication. Well-done.
I’m with D, just came here to get my coffee fix! ☺️😆
Awww, and it's always for you. That was so sweet. I'm so sorry, I suck at giving criticsm and feedback. What the hell am I doing here then? Lol, good question. I just wanted to read your poem! It was sooooo lovely and wonderful. Like a warm cup of coffee!
I really enjoyed reading this and then the opinions below. Especially Anneliese’s suggestions. I think I learned a lot from all of this! I only had one thought to add… and it’s about this line Have you made coffee at home, it’s simple. No really. I feel it as being sticky… as in, the poem reads better / flows better without it? 🤍🕊️✨
This reminds me of my mom and dad for they were coffee drinkers. If you wouldn't mind could you read my critiques of the various books I have read, reviewed and critiqued. Please.
quick question: if he spends the night, why do you bring him coffee in his office?
I'll give some comments, though some may be my personal preference/style so may not fit at all what you're trying to do; First of all, I like the style and content and sentimentality of this... but you want suggestions. I would retitle as "Coffee for your Heart" or "Extra Cup". For me, it needs a slightly stronger start. Just 3 or 4 lines (could be interleaved throughout, I think, if you want). I want to hear about the non-coffee lovable qualities of the unknown guest, perhaps, and then go into how happy you are that you can bond over coffee. Almost with a tone "is it silly of me that when I think of you I think of coffee? but this is why...." I also recommend shorter lines and tighter phrasings to find that comfortable balance between your almost conversational style and something with a little more rhythm that clearly feels more poemsy. There's some room for creative line-breaking if you want to emphasize certain phrases. Just some thoughts 💙💙Anneliese
I'm no critic, but... The only thing I would change is implying more went on between you too than coffee. "All those sleepless nights" could become "All those busy nights" or "All those [???] nights." Of course, then it loses its ambiguity.
This is such a bittersweet (pun intended) poem. Using coffee as a point of connection between this unknown person and yourself is so simple but powerful. I do like the air of mystery of who this person is. That way people can relate the feelings of the poems to whomever best applies.
☕This is sweet-♥️😁👍