Fiction
Snow 3
Are you sure you do not need any help? Look outside now at how hard it is snowing. Okay, maybe I do need a little help. Could we help each other? If you let me help you you will be helping me. There was a break in the snow, and we walked out of the house. There was still a little path where I walked, and we followed it. He told me if I get you home, I will have earned a prize. We found the road for I was looking for it earlier when it started. He helped me.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Snow 4
He helped me for I did need help finding the road again because of all the snow. I wonder what his prize was going to be. It was snowing so hard now, and I looked down and the only footprints were mine. The snow couldn't have covered up his so fast and not mind not even with the wind blowing. All of a sudden when I was just about to enter my yard I heard a slight ringing, and I thought when an angel gets his wings a bell starts to ring. Maybe there was something to that movie, right.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Snow
On a cold, windy and snowy morning when I was out walking in the woods I came across a set of tracks. I wasn't sure what kind they were, but I followed them anyhow. These tracks keep going in circles and for some reason I thought I was in Winnie the Pooh story and the Heffalump. I stopped looked around didn't see any more tracks to follow, so I decided to check out an old, deserted house for it started to get windy and I wanted to get out of it for a while. Snow and windy does not mix.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Snow, too.
I entered the old house just to get out of the wind for a little while. As I walked around shaking off the snow that was on me, I noticed that there were other footprints in here. I wondered and then I thought it was probably just some other kids being curious, then I heard it, a whisper. It was soft and it said, "Is it really cold out." I did answer, "Yes, who are you?"
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Plain Jane
Fern Michaels has written a family story that is also a romance story entitled 'Plain Jane'. This is the story of a woman named Jane who needs to overcome various things that happened during her childhood that seems to be also affecting her adulthood. Jane has godparents by he names of Trixie and Fred who raised her and try to help her in every way since. 'Plain Jane' is a story that will make you feel a range of emotions. It will also keep you turning the pages to see how everything turns out. It is an older book and has been out for a long time.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
This is going to hurt, okay?
Childhood. A soft caress of your warm blanket, a sweet touch of innonence and clean hands. She was a pretty girl skipping in her backyard while the smell of homemade cake wafted by the opened kitchen doors. The vanilla and chocolate scent swung in the air like someone created magical waves using a magical wand. Same like in the girl's favorite disney movies. "Get in here sweety, it's windy out there" The girl stopped skipping and answered back to her mother, "In a minute mom! I think its finally gonna rain!" She looked at the sky shielding her eyes from the wind just as a rain drop landed on her nose. She smiled and sat down in the grass, placing her skipping rope beside her.
By Maheera Burhanabout a year ago in Critique
Oregon!
Book Four of the Wagons West series entitled 'Oregon' by Dana Fuller Ross picks up right where 'Wyoming' finishes. America's first wagon train is only a few months out from ending their journey and starting their future. The wagon train in Little Valley and camped for the long winter. Spring has sprung and now to finish their journey to their new homes.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Baby
Once upon a time there was this cute, adorable baby all about one month old. We could tell that there was something special about this little one for just look at his face. He is sleeping so soundly but look closer he is also thinking. What is he thinking? Do we wake him? I say not. He could be thinking of ways to improve humans some way or maybe just when his mom will pick him up and cuddle. This little one has a lot of potential in his growing and to show us what is really important to us.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Just look at me.
"Just look at me. I wish I remembered what happened to me." I was sitting on a blanket with my child and all of a sudden a big something came after me. "I kind of remember sharp teeth, but who did the teeth belong to I wondered. While looking around I saw my kid who seemed to have tears running down her face and all I could not help her. What was happening to me and the sharp teeth. They did hurt, but I knew that my kid well I hoped would start yelling just a little louder. Mommy help!
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Just look at me 2
Mommy came a running out of the house and yelled at the thing that had me with its' teeth. The thing dropped me right then and I saw that my leg seemed to have a hole, and I felt funny a few other places too. The mommy and my kid were now going into the house and the mommy was getting ready to do something. I hope whatever doesn't hurt. My kid started to smile a little and mommy said "Mr. Bear should be good as new in a few days and we will check his hurts in a bit."
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Wyoming
Here is my critique on 'Wyoming' the third installment of the Wagons West series by Dana Fuller Ross. This part of the series picks up when the wagon train is just about to enter the Rocky Mountains right in time for the winter season. Whip, Cathy, and all the others will have to learn how to survive the season and how to deal when one feels 'cabin fever' along with meeting a few new people joining the train. There is on woman who can see the future at times, as well as two that come up from California way. There are various relationships that will see differences during this winter season in a place named Little Valley. The train is very close to their objective now.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
