The Sea… How I Love Thee!
Paul's Unofficial Remix Challenge
I last
Saw the sea…
When?
Oh, quite recently…
When this year was still new…
Beyond sloping, silvery, satin sands
White horses astride undulating swells of cobalt blue.
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Its gentle murmur
Drew me irresistibly
Beneath circling seagulls screeching…
Past toddlers’ tinkling laughter.
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Patiently…
I scanned the horizon
Leapt onto foaming, salty breakers…
Courting near disaster…
Eyes stinging!
Ears ringing!
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Flying like a demented arrow
I revelled in exhilarating, turbulent waves
Free from troubles; worries; sorrow
Unshackled from their anchor …
No longer their slave.
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Tyrannical time loosed his grip
Refreshed, renewed, reinvigorated
I was young!
I was free!
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Adrenaline coursed through my veins
My heart skipped merrily
Just one more wave…
No, make that three!
That last one ended quite scarily.
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Sadly, time regained his grip
Reluctantly, I bade the sea
A forlorn farewell.
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When?
Oh when
Will my next encounter be?
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Beach holidays beckon cheerily
Soon… ever so soon…
I’ll return…
And all will be well for me!
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The above poem is written for Paul’s Remix Challenge and is a remix of Paul Stewart’s fabulous poem, When Did You Last See The Sea
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Clearly, I have a close connection to water and its soothing influence, as seen also in My Perfect Place.
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Awesome work. Loved it!
Loved your flow, tone and optimistic approach. Excellent entry and this line rhymes so well in my head and with a bit of humour too! - “That last one ended quite scarily.” 😄👏☺️
This feels like it came from the heart of a surfer 🤍 I really loved this x
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This is a lovely, optimistic take on the theme. I love "Beach holidays beckon cheerily"; brings me right back to childhood for some reason!
Angie, it was a renewal! loved it
This was a gorgeous piece Angie!! I love the flow, your use of imagery and all the little sensory pieces you snuck in there! Masterful work and so well thought out!! Great work!!
Whoaaa, this was so stunningly beautiful! I'm so sorry for pointing this out but on the line "Tyrannical time loosed its grip", shouldn't it be "loosened"? You did such a brilliant job remixing Paul's poem! I loved it!
A blend of cheery and wistful! Excellent, Angie! Loved “Just one more wave… No, make that three!”
This is wonderful, Angie. I love how you brought a youthful and carefree energy to Paul's ode. There just something about the sea that brings out the child in us!
Well done! This is beautiful!❤️
Oh my...this is wonderful, Angie! I love how you responded to the question and loved the imagery you used throughout. So many great lines...I'll pick a few...even if it's hard to single out some... "Flying like a demented arrow I revelled in exhilarating, turbulent waves Free from troubles; worries; sorrow Unshackled from their anchor … No longer their slave." Love this section and then that it leads on to talk about time as being tyrannical...loved that word choice, Such an evocative poem and I felt it all...you painted a stunning picture that could be felt about the sea. Well done and thank you for such a gorgeous entry into the challenge.
Great imagery poem of the sea ❤️
What a hearty answer!
Gorgeous poem💗